Forging ahead with fictional endeavours: ~ Write a life on a page and hurry not to its grave; abhor not the coming age, for eternal is the next page. ~ Read what you will, I hope you will enjoy reading as much as I do writing.

Good kids


This one is for Monday’s finish the story. Not much to say about this one; I’ve a bloody headache and several real world problems to sit in the corner and grumble about. Much rather write though.

“They finally made their escape.”

Tires screeched and gears grinded as Dan developed a sudden case of lead foot. Houses whipped past he broke several road laws in desperation to leave suburbia behind. Hazel hung on for dear life as they drifted around corners.

“Why the hell did I let you talk me into it!” Dan cursed, narrowly avoiding a collision with an SUV. “What was I supposed to do?! They’re my Family!” Hazel retorted, slamming her palm into the dashboard as she jerked forward. “Family?! Switch them with raccoons and it would be an improvement!” He grumbled.

“They can’t help it! They don’t have your posh background!” Hazel shouted defensively.

“And, that excuses their sniping about my job?-” “Dan.” “-While your mother drinks their money and your brothers insinuate about dirty dealings in My company?” “DAN!”


“We forgot the kids!”

“Fantastic, that’ll teach ’em.”

Comments on: "Good kids" (18)

  1. What a shock ending ~ Totally unexpected ~ Brilliantly written ~

  2. Good story with a clever ending. Happy families, eh?

  3. Great ending. It doesn’t sound like he’s going to go back for them either 🙂

  4. Loved the ending! That will get them! 🙂 Thank you for participating in this Mondays challenge, and I hope you return for the next one! Be well! ^..^

  5. HA! These 150 word challenges are so much fun when they end with a twist. Yours was great.

  6. Great ending! Don’t you just love families… 🙂

  7. chrislb94 said:

    Many times I’ve considered “forgetting the kids” 😉 great ending 🙂 great story

  8. chrislb94 said:

    🙂 yep, exactly that!! 😉

  9. You did make me laugh with the ending. Yes I can well imagine that scenario.

  10. chrislb94 said:

    lol gotta keep ’em guessing 😉

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