Forging ahead with fictional endeavours: ~ Write a life on a page and hurry not to its grave; abhor not the coming age, for eternal is the next page. ~ Read what you will, I hope you will enjoy reading as much as I do writing.

on-on-offAnother combo prompt from me.  It’s like one writing prompt isn’t enough! 😀 The quote has been nicked from Adrian Lilly and photo prompt is from Rochelle, host of Friday Fictioneers.

Your character is very tired and the normally quiet neighbor is playing really loud music. Does your character go over to ask to turn the music down? What does s/he find if s/he does. If s/he tries to ignore it, how?

Should have gone with Pop-rock

Irene slammed her textbook against the wall. This was a clear violation of the rules. She was studying! The bastard’s heavy-metal was making the wall vibrate so hard her laptop skated off the desk. She imagined bursting in, yanking the cords and drenching the electrics. Irene bit her lip; since when was he the type to listen to this… this… RUBBISH. On cue the music got louder. Irene clapped hands over her ears, and marched to his door; now fully prepared to garotte the imbecile with his own electrical cords. Irene shoved his door open to discover he was… Crying?!


Comments on: "Should have gone with pop-rock" (36)

  1. Oh, this is good! Love it 🙂

  2. Mmm. Why? To be continued?

  3. He must have really been crying! More like sobbing and screaming! Probably having a tantrum and throwing things against the wall… oops, I better stop. My imagination is running away with me. 😀 😀 Very good story!

  4. Wow. That was a better turn then the one I write. Great job.

    • Realistic twists get more difficult as word length decreases. Your twist was good but I felt it would have benefited from an extra 100 words to flesh out the characters a little before the twist. Flash fiction is more challenging then novels in some ways.

  5. Great twist at the end. Well done. I was all with my namesake and then crumpled anger. Poor chap it must have been bad to have to turn it up that loud to drown the sobs.

  6. Heavy Metal has that effect on me too 🙂 Well, actually I like Heavy Metal but I wouldn’t want it pounding through the walls!

    • I grew a fond dislike of the genre because of family members who insisted on playing it this loud. I actually don’t mind it these days but only because I’m in charge of the volume.

  7. A surprise ending that left me wondering. Nicely done.

  8. […] Should Have Gone with Pop-rock […]

  9. Whoops! Well, that was unexpected. I guess she’ll forgive the loudness this time. Nice write!

  10. I love unexpected endings and the end was unexpected by me. Good job. 🙂

  11. Really didn’t expect that one. Loved it. 🙂

  12. Loved all the description and flying tempers in this. The last line is open to interpretation, I think. Loud music to drown his sorrows, perhaps?

  13. Clearly, the music was a cry for help. Nice surprise ending. 🙂

  14. Nice. Vivid descriptions that had me in the room pounding the wall for silence.

  15. It must have been a very touching song, something about puppies or Mama. I really loved the image of the laptop skating off the desk. Very well written and topical.

  16. Damn… you got me with this one. drenching the electrics… love that!

  17. What a powerful little story. I’ve (on occasion) probably been that neighbor cranking up the music due to being in a really bad mood and just not caring. I suspect we all have. This actually really works me as a total story.

    • I’d call it an ideal chapter both complete as a story but with room for another chapter. And I’ve had neighbours do this too. -_-

  18. Surprise ending! Maybe a form of Gestalt therapy. I think there is a lot of pain in between the lines.

    • Reading between the lines is the only way with Flash Fiction – there’s so little space that a lot has to be inferred rather than stated.

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